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    CaptainKlutz
    last edited by 14 Jan 2024, 09:52

    "Beings from beyond our sphere of existence, the Seraphim are more than simply alien. Command an army of unique and powerful weaponry out of reach of the human factions, and combine fearsome technology with tactical unit compositions to overwhelm your opponents."

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      IndexLibrorum Global Moderator @CaptainKlutz
      last edited by 14 Jan 2024, 10:51

      @captainklutz Aaand we got a winner.

      "Design is an iterative process. The required number of iterations is one more than the number you have currently done. This is true at any point in time."

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        A Former User @CaptainKlutz
        last edited by 14 Jan 2024, 11:00

        @captainklutz And for the rest 3 factions please.

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          Zeldafanboy
          last edited by Zeldafanboy 14 Jan 2024, 17:07

          No offense, but most of these attempts are really bad because they try to make the faction sound epic in a forced cringey way. Just explain the background of the faction and their gameplay strengths. Saying that the Seraphim are “unique,” “powerful” and “fearsome” is meaningless. And what faction doesn’t use tactical unit compositions to win? That’s just the basic strategy of the game…

          put the xbox units in the game pls u_u

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            CaptainKlutz @Guest
            last edited by 14 Jan 2024, 19:08

            @melanol Stalwart defenders of the old human values, the UEF find strength in unyielding rigidity. Their conventional but deadly weapons are capable of delivering destruction at any range while withstanding significant counter-fire from their foes.

            The Aeon are zealots enhanced by technology from beyond normal human grasp. To succeed as one requires mastery of not only the harmony of their standard ground forces, but also sowing discord with their variety of specialised units.

            Fighting a vicious war for their freedom, the Cybran are one with their machines, producing some of the most brutally efficient weaponry in the galaxy. However, their arsenal is far from being just direct, as their stealth and subterfuge capabilities are second to none.

            Beings from beyond our sphere of existence, the Seraphim are more than simply alien. Command an army of unique and powerful weaponry out of reach of the human factions, and combine extraterrestrial technology and tactics to overwhelm your opponents.

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              IndexLibrorum Global Moderator @CaptainKlutz
              last edited by 14 Jan 2024, 19:12

              @captainklutz The aeon one feels like it missed the mark. How about something that highlights their love for precision, range, and high alpha dmg?

              "Design is an iterative process. The required number of iterations is one more than the number you have currently done. This is true at any point in time."

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                snoog
                last edited by 14 Jan 2024, 19:20

                Here, using GPT-4.

                United Earth Federation (UEF): The United Earth Federation strives to unite the galaxy under a single banner, offering stability and order through a human-centric government. They boast powerful and versatile conventional military technology, exemplifying strength and resilience in their war machinery.
                
                Cybran Nation: The Cybran Nation, composed of cybernetically-enhanced humans, fights for the liberation of their kind from oppression. Their technology focuses on stealth and electronic warfare, enabling them to launch surprise attacks and manipulate the battlefield with advanced robotics.
                
                Aeon Illuminate: The Aeon Illuminate, followers of an alien philosophy known as 'The Way', seek to enlighten the galaxy and bring peace through understanding. Their technology is advanced and exotic, harnessing the power of quantum energy and focusing on precision and agility.
                
                Seraphim: The Seraphim, an enigmatic and powerful alien race, are the newest contenders, seeking retribution and the spread of their own zealous beliefs. Their technology is highly advanced and alien, focusing on overwhelming firepower and robust, imposing units, often surpassing the other factions in sheer power.
                
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                  veteranashe
                  last edited by 14 Jan 2024, 19:36

                  There is faction descriptions that come with the game, are they not good enough?

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                    ThomasHiatt
                    last edited by 14 Jan 2024, 20:52

                    Did you guys miss the part where they said they already found good wording and there's just nobody on FAF capable of copy pasting the text to the website?

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                      IndexLibrorum Global Moderator @ThomasHiatt
                      last edited by IndexLibrorum 14 Jan 2024, 21:20

                      @thomashiatt Yes I did miss that.

                      How do we not have someone that can edit the website?

                      "Design is an iterative process. The required number of iterations is one more than the number you have currently done. This is true at any point in time."

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                        waffelzNoob
                        last edited by 15 Jan 2024, 12:44

                        Just don't try to attribute gameplay traits to a faction because they just don't work. The only one that does is cybran being stealthy

                        frick snoops!

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                          Nex @waffelzNoob
                          last edited by 15 Jan 2024, 13:13

                          @waffelznoob
                          UEF units have more hp (generally)
                          Aeon has more specialised units / their units are missing weapons/features that comparable units of other factions have.
                          Seraphim have more multi-purpose units

                          There are things your can attribute to the factions, but the impact they have on how the faction plays differently from the others is questionable

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                            BlackYps
                            last edited by 15 Jan 2024, 13:51

                            Maybe you should first discuss what you want to have in the text, like generally, before you iterate on the wording.
                            Should it just be lore flavor, or unit design, or gameplay implications?

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                              nine2
                              last edited by 15 Jan 2024, 14:36

                              First I think you need to work our what the point of the page is. Is it to convert rts fans to supcom? Or is it to convert steam fa players to faf?

                              After that pick text that helps with that goal. What's the goal

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                                arma473 @nine2
                                last edited by 15 Jan 2024, 14:41

                                @blackyps @nine2 We did have that discussion

                                https://forum.faforever.com/topic/5469/factions-text-for-web-site-need-suggestions

                                We should come up with better descriptions for the four factions.

                                Before we can do that, we need to decide what purpose and tone this section of the web site should have and who its intended audience is.

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                                  waffelzNoob @Nex
                                  last edited by waffelzNoob 17 Jan 2024, 22:37

                                  @nex said in Kindergartener wording and design of the main page:

                                  @waffelznoob
                                  UEF units have more hp (generally)
                                  Aeon has more specialised units / their units are missing weapons/features that comparable units of other factions have.
                                  Seraphim have more multi-purpose units

                                  There are things your can attribute to the factions, but the impact they have on how the faction plays differently from the others is questionable.

                                  Try to explain to a newbie why the faction that is advertised as "the tanky faction" has the least tanky tanks at t2 stage, and why their percival is matched by the brick. They also have the squishiest T4, but atleast the buildings are consistent. In any case, too many exceptions to the rule.

                                  Aeon's only specialised unit is the absolver.
                                  Units lacking weapons and/or features that units from other factions do have is not exactly a selling point, and not consistent either.

                                  Seraphim has more multi-purpose units? Which ones? And please don't mention the zthuee being a good unit to have out on the seas

                                  Edit: won't be responding on this matter further, just bringing out my views. Don't really wanna flood the thread. In my opinion, keep the descriptions lore and design oriented.

                                  frick snoops!

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                                    FunkOff @magge
                                    last edited by 19 Jan 2024, 16:15

                                    @magge said in Kindergartener wording and design of the main page:

                                    for whatever reason, the conversation veered off track into negativity

                                    Yes, FAFers are quite the argumentative type lol

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